Friday, April 1, 2011

Anathema - Poetry


I saw you in the marketplace
with swollen eyes and fallen face,
and marked the absence of your ring.
One does not probe that sort of thing.

But others are inclined to delve
(and then congratulate themselves
on avoiding such a dismal fate).
Alas, you found out far too late,

once he'd been under another's spell,
and since she'd left his heart a shell,
and revenge on women overdue,
he thought he'd do the same to you.

With “Gee, I'm sorry for this mess.
Perhaps you can return the dress.”
He couldn't forget the girl he'd wed,
so hung you, her effigy, instead.

Anathema: 1. anything laid up or suspended; hence, anything laid up in a temple or set apart as sacred. (As used in the Greek New Testament).
2. someone or something intensely disliked or loathed (Merriam-Webster)

25 comments:

  1. Wonderful start to the challenge and an excellent read. Good luck with the rest of the challenge.
    Yvonne,

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  2. This was beautifully done Li! Looking forward to B :)

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  3. That was stunning! I won't be forgetting this post in a hurry.

    Ellie Garratt

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  4. I'm glad there are poets in the house today. I've never been very good at poetry so its fun to visit sites with good poetry. Thanks!

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  5. Loved it, can't wait to see what you come up with tomorrow :D

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  6. Fabulous start to the challenge. I love the new words :)
    Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow

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  7. A is for Awesome...and this is an awesome start to the challenge! :)

    I'm your newest follower. *waves*

    Off to try and make my rounds through the huge list.
    Happy weekend,
    Lola

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  8. Very poetic and interesting. Love it! Good wAy to start the dAy! :) You are very eloquent.

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  9. I love poetry and this is beautiful.

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  10. Beautiful poem! I started reading flash fiction stories last year, and I recently began writing my own pieces. It's challenging but fun! So I'm glad to have stumbled across your blog. :) Happy writing & blogging!

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  11. Love this. It's a great way to kick off the challenge!

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  12. Wonderfully done! I'm happy to meet you as we start this challenge. And isn't this fitting since today is the first day of National Poetry Month? Thank you!

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  13. Beautiful poem!

    Great way to start the A-Z Challenge. :)

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  14. Gorgeous Li! That one keeps you thinking...
    See you tomorrow
    Lx

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  15. Most excellent and refreshing. Great to meet you on our mutual Challenge!
    Aloha
    Toby
    http://www.tobyneal.net/

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  16. This is really good Li. Made me think, which was a nice surprise. Runaway Groom, instead of runaway bride.

    Have you ever seen the movie "The Bride Wore Black"? French movie by Truffaut, excellent (classic) thriller. Very Hitchcock.

    Marcus

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  17. What a great way to kick-off the Challenge. Of course your words are deep, thought provoking and moving as always. I enjoyed learning a new word too!

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  18. Great poem. You got talent, kid. We can take youse out on the Altoona circuit!

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  19. Wonderfully put. My potluck: http://verseinanutshell.wordpress.com/2011/05/16/protect/

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  20. Wow, intense and painful piece.

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  21. read a few poems today but this is the first one that I thought deserved a comment...nicely written.

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  22. Story woven with a dialogue. Great work!

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  23. poetic and compelling, you rock.

    Greetings:

    How have you been?

    I have been sick last week, sorry for missing some of your potluck entries.
    Hope to see you join our poetry potluck week 36 today!

    Week 36 Theme is sketches, images, and impressions,
    But you are NOT required to submit theme fitting pieces, old poems or poems unrelated to our theme are all welcome…

    Looking forward to reading you again.

    xoxox

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