tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post1763494890431648147..comments2024-03-20T21:37:01.626-04:00Comments on Flash Fiction: Open Water - Flash FictionLihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-83969693445273228982011-12-11T10:16:08.099-05:002011-12-11T10:16:08.099-05:00@Shah - you're welcome
@instantinsurance - no...@Shah - you're welcome<br /><br />@instantinsurance - not sure if I translated your comment correctly? The best I can do...<br />"This blog is an exact representation of skills. I like your recommendation. A great concept that reflects the thoughts of the writer. HR consulting"Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-69006774259254703922011-12-10T13:57:39.861-05:002011-12-10T13:57:39.861-05:00Chuffed you linked this at my hop - a beautiful ex...Chuffed you linked this at my hop - a beautiful expression Li. XShah Whartonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04997125261145672115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-29800095773058922752011-12-09T14:05:17.138-05:002011-12-09T14:05:17.138-05:00Hopping for Shah's Hop this weekend. I have ne...Hopping for Shah's Hop this weekend. I have never written a flash piece. You are brave. LOL<br /><br />-Nora<br />http://norabpeevy.blogspot.com/2011/12/mistletoe-egg-foo-young.htmlNora B. Peevyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00726206041488220699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-28273357182741150052011-08-30T20:16:57.586-04:002011-08-30T20:16:57.586-04:00Thank you, Rasz. This was one of those stories whi...Thank you, Rasz. This was one of those stories which formed itself all at once.<br /><br />@Ms. Queenly - a nice critique, thank you!Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-60291946447883521032011-08-30T12:13:14.500-04:002011-08-30T12:13:14.500-04:00Your narration is so point-on and I just love the ...Your narration is so point-on and I just love the last paragraph, so poignant. Your description of the characters is so bold and well-worded. Loved this.Ms. Queenlyhttp://cradleofchicadas.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-38994407658926379562011-08-29T23:33:05.893-04:002011-08-29T23:33:05.893-04:00Wow! What an incredible mix of emotions and imager...Wow! What an incredible mix of emotions and imagery! Great job Li!Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03717894057589454128noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-6167521410726247572011-08-28T04:57:13.108-04:002011-08-28T04:57:13.108-04:00@Renee - if I were to expand this - no, it wouldn&...@Renee - if I were to expand this - no, it wouldn't end tragically.<br /><br />@Madeleine - thank you, I'm glad the flow came across.<br /><br />@Yvonne - hard work sometimes as well, just as you try and fit experiences into a doazen lines of poetry!<br /><br />Stu - thank you. I wanted something beautiful to come from some ugly realities.<br /><br />Denise - thanks for checking in via mobile! glad you liked it.<br /><br />Alex - unfortunately, I sat next to a guy on bu one time at the beach who...umm...fit the description. *makes a face*<br /><br />Daydreamertoo - yep, it's the rigging. And I, for one, would have liked to be up there!<br /><br />Kwee - thoughtful comment. I hesitated to use the word crazy since it can be derogatory, but I wanted to tell the story honestly.<br /><br />Marsha - thank you. I work hard to use the senses and "show, not tell". :-)Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-58643577945485932692011-08-27T16:01:33.383-04:002011-08-27T16:01:33.383-04:00I love the rich imagery, especially this mix of sm...I love the rich imagery, especially this mix of smells...salt spray, fried onions, and sunscreen. The emotions between the pair are complex, but explained well in such a short work. Nice!Marsha A. Moorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18380081382159214513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-14023589462450130462011-08-27T13:46:46.589-04:002011-08-27T13:46:46.589-04:00Crazy needs to be loved too, it's just sad it ...Crazy needs to be loved too, it's just sad it wears out the one that loves them so much. I hope he continues to find the strength, she does love him, she trusts him, just in her own "crazy" way. You did this very nicely and covered so gracefully so many issues.Kwee Cats and Arthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16650228469037436925noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-81608298807965599992011-08-27T12:53:25.438-04:002011-08-27T12:53:25.438-04:00This is so full of rich descriptions of both chara...This is so full of rich descriptions of both characters, moods and scenery. I could see her at the top of the sails climbing along the rigging or whatever it's all called and those watching her waiting to see if she'd fall.<br />A very nice read, thank you.Daydreamerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04139175719967937843noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-44179753571709125952011-08-27T10:32:08.254-04:002011-08-27T10:32:08.254-04:00Very nice! And fried onions and sunscreen is an in...Very nice! And fried onions and sunscreen is an interesting combination of smells.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-37646288864386255232011-08-27T09:21:18.682-04:002011-08-27T09:21:18.682-04:00I came in via my phone Li. I agree. This is beauti...I came in via my phone Li. I agree. This is beautiful. You use some amazing imagery. I love how it begins and ends especially. Fantastic entry.<br /><br />DeniseDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-48517574265134572212011-08-27T05:58:05.958-04:002011-08-27T05:58:05.958-04:00Most enjoyable to read, I think it is clever to wr...Most enjoyable to read, I think it is clever to write a fiction in so few words..<br /><br /><br />Yvonne.RHYTHM AND RHYMEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11386975261804630799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-32291822133794717402011-08-27T03:01:30.475-04:002011-08-27T03:01:30.475-04:00Li I love this. It is beautiful. The ideas, the fl...Li I love this. It is beautiful. The ideas, the flow, the imagery. Fab! :O)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-59468897015933637012011-08-26T19:03:19.670-04:002011-08-26T19:03:19.670-04:00I really like this. I'm drawn both to "he...I really like this. I'm drawn both to "her" reaching for freedom, and the "caretaker?" so willing to be there. And can only hope it doesn't end tragically.Reneehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00955772837133239769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-20229845677617420212011-08-26T18:43:39.648-04:002011-08-26T18:43:39.648-04:00Well, Jules, I can only say that you were one of t...Well, Jules, I can only say that you were one of the first believers and so I owe you a huge debt of gratitude. As my funds are low, perhaps you would settle for virtual hugs and some chocolate?Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-78106523565732851952011-08-26T18:38:11.643-04:002011-08-26T18:38:11.643-04:00Sam - I think it varies with the individual, of co...Sam - I think it varies with the individual, of course. For some, it's the sheer adrenaline rush, for others, the sense of accomplishment after mastering a challenging situation and/or one's fear. For this character, it's freedom from the overwhelming input of life in general. There is nothing but pure physical sensory input; wind, water, sky.<br />I'm glad you loved it - it's the reason for writing.<br /><br />Darlene - thank you, and thank you for dropping by!<br /><br />Marc - you hit the nail on the end. Sometimes the drumbeat of society is deafening; those who seek to escape it by following a different pulse are called "mad".<br /><br />Anna - I was more or less playing with the word "crazy" in all of its different contexts. Yes, she is a human and suffering from mental illness. While I certainly don't agree with using the word crazy or other derogatory terms which stigmatize those suffering from mental or emotional issues, it is nevertheless still used in the general population and I never shy away from reality in portraying fictional characters.<br /><br />As a matter of fact, all of these characters are crazy by someone's standards; the bystander for taking pleasure in other people's misery, the boyfriend for being crazy in love with the girl, his parents and friends think he's crazy for sacrificing his life to take care of her, and he thinks they're crazy for wanting him to abandon her.<br /><br />And, of course, it's a love story :-)<br /><br />Thanks for reading.Lihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08831231531918915804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-47981254380866046682011-08-26T18:21:50.382-04:002011-08-26T18:21:50.382-04:00"SHE," is irrelevant! A beautiful piece ..."SHE," is irrelevant! A beautiful piece of work here dear girl. For some one who once claimed "Not to be a writer" you sure have me fooled. :)<br /><a href="http://fragilemouse.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Jules @ Trying To Get Over The Rainbow</a>Juleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02136045025997662057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-62864047622617279092011-08-26T17:15:07.192-04:002011-08-26T17:15:07.192-04:00Dear Li,
This is such an amazingly beautiful text,...Dear Li,<br />This is such an amazingly beautiful text, but I am not sure I understand it. Is the 'she' in your story a human being or an animal or something else? The labels tell me that she may be a mental patient. Oooh, what a difficult relationship!<br />No, I don't really understand everything in your text, but I love it, just the same. It speaks to the heart. Love is not always something that can be explained.<br /><br />Gosh, you sure are a good writer. You give me goose-bumps!<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Anna <br /><br /><a href="http://annasadornments.blogspot.com/2011/08/smooth-sailing-romantic-friday-writers.html" rel="nofollow">Anna's RFW No. 16 'Smooth Sailing'</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17926688000745346961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-40696422842761111342011-08-26T16:14:31.202-04:002011-08-26T16:14:31.202-04:00Oooh this is so rich, like the ripples in water wh...Oooh this is so rich, like the ripples in water when one object is dropped in but which continue to swell in a wider diameter.<br /><br />Loved the part about her seeking to break the connection with terra firma, to pulse at a different rhtyhm<br /><br />marc nashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-16459260406286878852011-08-26T16:01:00.462-04:002011-08-26T16:01:00.462-04:00Really enjoyed this Flash Fiction :) Looking forw...Really enjoyed this Flash Fiction :) Looking forward to more from you .. <br /><br />DarleneDarlene Steelman McGarrityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14276345723955344662noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7005986735966635433.post-27981090310429275422011-08-26T15:37:23.101-04:002011-08-26T15:37:23.101-04:00Li, this is so amazingly beautiful. This line was ...Li, this is so amazingly beautiful. This line was my absolute favorite: "I don't know why, but the only time she feels secure, whole, happy, is when her ties to this world are as fragile as possible." As a traveler, I seem to know a lot of people like this, people who live on the edges of cliffs because that's when they feel most themselves. They always say that they feel most "alive," but deeper than that, I think it's how you say it -- there's a security there for them, a wholeness and maybe even happiness. I don't know why either, but I can relate and this piece will have me reflecting more on why I am the way I am. Thank you so much for putting this together and for your talent with words. I know that I couldn't have expressed it any better myself.Samantha Bangayanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10126342453185964881noreply@blogger.com