Thursday, August 4, 2011

Semaphore - Poetry

Challenge No. 13 - 5th August
This week's prompt for
Romantic Friday Writers

Semaphore

speak to me
somnolent murmurs
exultant cries
ravishing prose
and sighs
wetly entwined

speak to me
with flesh on flesh
telegraphed intent
delicate tracery
eyes neck lips
fingertips

speak to me
by tender missive
notes scrawled
laundry lists
or epistles
on my skin

speak to me
with cherished scent
old jokes
half-remembered
midnight
recollections

speak to me
one thousand ways
never a word
if you like
be silent
just not still

30 comments:

  1. A pleasure to read , the message coming over loud and clear.

    Yvonne.

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  2. Beautiful, Li. Simply beautiful. OK...once again, every time you write to me that you can't do something, the next thing out of my mouth/typing will be "OH YEAH? Now do it!". You are too talented to not try all you can.

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  3. Loved this poem. Great reflection on relationships and sharing love and lives. :O)

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  4. It has a really nice rhythm to it, just like a song.

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  5. Good rhythm, it seems to wash over me. I like the repeating first line.

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  6. If music could be soundless, it would feel like this! The piece was like a song in my head, liked it a lot. Speak to me. . those three words seem very, very piercing. Lovely!

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  7. Very sensual, a lovely write and a lovely read.

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  8. You showed your creativity and talent with this poem, Li. Perfect ending.

    Beautiful!

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  9. I really liked the way the last line of each stanza segued into the new theme of the next. Well done!

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  10. Hi,

    So love the rhythm and blues of this: a saxophone playing in the background, sultry voice letting loose the words on the ether. Lovely, lovely, lovely! ;)

    best
    F

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  11. Lovely rhythm in this poem about relationships.
    Well done.
    Anna
    Anna's Romantic Friday No 13 - 'Voices'

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  12. A powerful voice, excellent rhythm and emotion. Awesome :)

    ......dhole

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  13. Oh, this is my favorite type of poetry! I love how your words flow over me. It feels like a stream of images slipping through my mind. Stunning!

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  14. As Francine says, a saxophone would not be out of place. I'll be singing this poem all day. Wonderful for Voices.

    Denise

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  15. It flows right off the tip of my tongue... Beautiful!

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  16. I like the flow of this poem. Love these lines:

    "speak to me
    one thousand ways
    never a word
    if you like
    be silent
    just not still"

    I also belong to a poetry community, D'Verse. You might want to link up with us for our activities specially every Tuesday starting at 3 pm EST. Here is the link: http://dversepoets.com/

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  17. Love the last line, and the "epistles on my skin". Great imagery!

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  18. Beautiful! Love the last two lines.

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  19. Love it. My favourite is
    speak to me
    one thousand ways
    never a word
    if you like
    be silent
    just not still

    Well written!

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  20. some really fun word play here...

    delicate tracery
    eyes neck lips
    fingertips

    nice...and love the continued call to speak to me...as communication is huge in relationships and often one of the biggest failings...

    and in the end the relief that it need not be vocal...i like...smiles.

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  21. This is a rather provocative piece. I haven't heard the word "semaphore" for quite some time and interestingly in this context.

    Lee
    Tossing It Out

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  22. Lots of sensory details here - sound, smell, touch, visuals. Nice!

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  23. Hi Li. coming round for judging. Your poem really rocks.

    There is a discussion on-going on the RFWer site. Would appreciate if you would drop by, leave a comment and vote. We need your input!

    Here's the direct link:

    http://fridaynightwriters.blogspot.com/2011/08/weekly-wrap-up-voices-challenge-no-13.html

    Thank you

    Denise

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  24. Congratulations, Li! You made Featured Writer of the Week. A well-deserved award for this piece.

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  25. May I please quote this poem in a post of mine? I'll link back.

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    1. Yes. I seldom write poetry, this is one of the few that I was actually happy with.

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